User talk:RingtailedFox

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Oh! How I Hate to Get Up in the Morning/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Overall, the article is well written. It does a good job of describing the song and its history. There are a few things I noted as I read the article:

1. The lead should summarize the whole article, so it should mention that the song was part of Ziegfeld follies of 1918 and This is the Army.
2. "Although his voice was thin, his timing was perfect and he presented a hilarious stage persona" is point of view. I would recommend, "According to the reviews, his voice was thin, but his timing was perfect and he presented a hilarious stage persona."
3. A description of the plot of the song would be nice in the "Production" section. Something along the lines of, "The song tells the story of a man who asks a soldier about life in the army. The soldier describes his hatred of waking up and of the bugler that plays reveille. He says that he hopes to become a bugler so that he can wake up the troops and return to bed."
4. Was the song ever released on an album?
5. The quotation in the lead section would be better if it was moved to later in the article. It could be replaced in the lead with a summary of the statement (eg. "Discussing his reasons for writing the song, Berlin said that reveille was his least favorite part of army life.").
6. The Google Books references should be formatted with the {{cite book}} template found at Wikipedia:Citation templates.
7. In the "Reception" section, the first sentence in the third paragraph has five references. It looks like something might have been removed, as reference 2 is placed there twice. How many of the references are actually relevant to that sentence?

I will place the nomination on hold for one week to allow for these concerns to be addressed and/or discussed. Any comments or questions can be left here, as I have the page on my watchlist. Best wishes, GaryColemanFan (talk) 05:50, 5 October 2008 (UTC)

Hi, thanks very much for the swift review. Insightful feedback; I'll be on it soon. Durova^Charge! 06:18, 5 October 2008 (UTC)

A week has passed, and these concerns remain. I am failing the review, but I urge future editors to use this feedback in preparing the article for its next GA nomination. GaryColemanFan (talk) 05:19, 12 October 2008 (UTC)

Dead Links

The wikipedia link for Kitchen Police

  https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Kitchen_Police&action=edit&redlink=1

is dead as well as the associated reference link [12] to the 1984 edition of "The world of musical comedy" by Stanley Green. In fact, that edition may never have existed as a 1984 edition does not appear in the complete list of editions of this book

  https://books.google.com/books?q=editions:ISBN0498014096]

I found 1974 and 1980 editions

  https://books.google.com/books?id=_AwJAQAAMAAJ&q=Irving+Berlin+Kitchen+Police
  https://books.google.com/books?id=noufAAAAMAAJ&q=kitchen+police

but they reference different pages so it seem to not be just a simple typo by the original editor.

In addition, the original source for the sheet music images here and on wikisource

  https://en.wikisource.org/wiki/Oh,_How_I_Hate_to_Get_Up_in_the_Morning

have changed. It appears that the John Hopkins music repository has changed the format of their links

  from:  http://levysheetmusic.mse.jhu.edu/levy-cgi/display.cgi?id=078.098.000;pages=3;range=0-2
  to:    http://levysheetmusic.mse.jhu.edu/collection/078/098

Since they have a huge collection of public domain titles I suspect that there are a very large number of dead links to their music on Wikipedia. Perhaps it is possible to make Global changes to Wikipedia links. I tried to correct the source link on the subject Wikisource commons page

  https://en.wikisource.org/wiki/File:Oh_How_I_Hate_to_Get_up_in_the_Morning_1c.jpg

but there is no edit mode. I suspect why but this is not an uncommon issue. I am only an occasional contributor - I neither know how nor have an access level to do these fixes myself so the best I can do is post this alert. ArtKocsis (talk) 07:08, 16 October 2017 (UTC)