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Military history WikiProject Newsletter - Issue III - May 2006

The May 2006 issue of the Military history WikiProject newsletter has been published. You may read the newsletter, change the format in which future issues will be delivered to you, or unsubscribe from this notification by following the link. Thank you. Kirill Lokshin 05:21, 25 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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Great work on adding the French task force tag everywhere! If it's not too much trouble, might you be able to roll any of the old task force banners (like {{WPMILHIST Napoleonic Era task force}}) that you find into the new format as well? Thanks! Kirill Lokshin 23:16, 26 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

France in the American Revolutionary War

I have begun the translation of the sections in French, hopefully, it won't sound too weird (I'm not terribly good at translating from french to english, and the french text is written in a present narrative tense, I'm trying to match the rest of the article in the past sense). There's a few inconsistencies in the french source, which might find their way within the english translation. Please keep the grayed french source for a little while in the body of the article as I'll probably want to try and improve the translation. Equendil 22:09, 30 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

French Navy

Balance is needed in articles. Don't revert, please, without adding to the balance.

Thank you - U.S. FAC

Hi,

Thank you for supporting the recent FAC of United States, but unfortunately it failed to pass. However, I hope you will vote again in the future. In the mean time, please accept this Mooncake as a token of my gratitude.--Ryz05 _t 15:41, 11 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

A request

I was wondering if you might be able to do some stylistic copyediting on Italian War of 1521? There's a number of objections on the FAC calling for an outside copyedit on the basis of the prose being too thick; and there are, unfortunately, relatively few good writers (with an understanding of what a military history article should look like) that I can turn to.

My apologies for imposing on you; feel free to tell me to bugger off if you've got better things to do. ;-) Kirill Lokshin 18:44, 16 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Of course; whenever you have the time. It's only a day into the FAC, so there's absolutely no rush as far as I can see. Thanks a lot! Kirill Lokshin 18:53, 16 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Marvelous work; thank you very much for you help! Kirill Lokshin 23:50, 16 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Albert Lebrun

I'm struggling to see why President Albert Lebrun would be part of the WP:MILHIST project. Or Charles Martel, Jacques Chaban-Delmas, Edmond Michelet, Charles Maurice de Talleyrand-Périgord and so on. Angus McLellan (Talk) 17:47, 17 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Well, Edmond Michelet wasn't defence minister to the best of my knowledge. But that doesn't really answer my question. The articles in question aren't (or haven't been, and being cynical, never will be) supported by WP:MILHIST, defenceministeriality being only a very small part of most of them. It just seems odd and (perhaps) rather pointless. Something else just occurred to me: you aren't doing this manually are you ? You could get a bot to do it, based on categories, or sign up for WP:AWB and use that. Thanks anyway and good luck ! Angus McLellan (Talk) 17:57, 17 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Re: Congratulations

Thanks! (And it was in no small part thanks to your copyediting that it was successful!) Kirill Lokshin 15:48, 24 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Military history WikiProject Newsletter - Issue IV - June 2006

The June 2006 issue of the Military history WikiProject newsletter has been published. You may read the newsletter, change the format in which future issues will be delivered to you, or unsubscribe from this notification by following the link. Thank you. Kirill Lokshin 05:21, 30 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Macedonia (terminology)

Thank you for your comment. Large scale modifications have taken place since you made it. For more details, please refer to the link above, and to the article itself. :NikoSilver: 12:31, 14 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Asking for a favor

Hi UberCryxic,

I noticed that you're quite skilled in English and that you helped Kirill to copyedit his recent FAC. I'm in the same case as he is: the article Vasilevsky is on FAC right now and some style problems were reported, something I can't exactly fix (an external eye and a good English are required :)

Could you please spare some minutes and have a look at it? :)

Thanks in advance, Grafikm ^(AutoGRAF) 15:10, 17 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

First French Empire

I hope I'm not being a problem for you here, but at First French Empire, I think you didn't get things quite right with your last edit. (Among other things, you reverted from cite.php to an older style of citation that is harder to maintain.) Since you say "do NOT revert" and you clearly usually know what you are doing, I hesitated, but I'm pretty sure what I did was correct. Please do check it, though. I'm not meaning to blindside you. - Jmabel | Talk 05:26, 20 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Military history WikiProject Newsletter - Issue V - July 2006

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Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Macedonia (terminology)

Hey, for what it's worth, thanks for your productive comments (as opposed to some other's) and your support in this crazy 'list' debate. I am going to leave it as it was. I don't deserve harrassment for this contribution! :NikoSilver: 22:54, 24 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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This is an automated delivery by grafikbot - 19:33, 26 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Incidentally, might I be able to convince you to put yourself forward? :-) Kirill Lokshin 20:26, 28 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Re: Request

It would crash and burn in short order if you were to take it to FAC right now, I think. The main problems:

Lack of concrete information about what the Center does. The "Female genital cutting" section only mentions that the Center considers it a violation of human rights (well, yeah...); the "Trafficking of women" section doesn't even mention the Center. Where the information is present, it's either very non-specific (e.g. "Tahirih employees have given presentations throughout the United States to publicize various issues") or not enough to establish why the organization is notable (e.g. "In 2003, Tahirih raised over $12,000 USD through WLN fundraising events and membership drives").
The article seems to be sourced primarily from the organization itself, which isn't necessarily the best or most neutral source. I don't know to what extent this could be fixed simply by increasing the "Criticism and response" section.

It's not a bad start, but it really needs more work. Kirill Lokshin 13:02, 28 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

That looks fine, actually; it's more content-related weaknesses than prose ones at this point. Kirill Lokshin 13:51, 28 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Remind me then! ;-) Kirill Lokshin 13:57, 28 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Somewhat better, but there are still issues with very vague statements (e.g. "its pioneering work in gender-based asylum law", "works within the legal confines established by the United States Congress to ensure the safety of women and girls trafficked to the United States", and so forth) that don't really tell the reader what the organization is doing. Is there more information on its activities available that you could use here?

The article also needs lots more footnotes, though; entire sections are basically uncited at this point. (You should probably trim the "See also" section as well; I think everything there is already linked from the article, no?) Kirill Lokshin 20:58, 1 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Actually, more recent FAs tend to run closer to 2–3 footnotes per KB ;-)

But fair enough; I can go through and mark the things that I think need to be cited. Would you prefer a list here, or should I just add {{fact}} tags in your sandbox? Kirill Lokshin 21:49, 1 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I've added a bunch of {{fact}} tags. Hopefully I didn't miss anything obvious. Kirill Lokshin 00:24, 2 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I've put in some general reminders on the talk page for the time being. I'll try to keep an eye on the article and step in if things get particularly out of hand; but this topic is rather far outside my area of expertise, so I'll probably be flailing about wildly ;-) Kirill Lokshin 03:12, 2 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Looks fine; you're probably at the point where someone like myself can't really offer more help, and you need instead to get opinions of people with more experience with these topics (and with writing more politically-oriented articles). Kirill Lokshin 16:15, 2 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Tahirih Justice Center

I'll take a good read over the next couple days, and try to document/fix the places where I think the article could be improved. You've put a lot of great work into the article so far, and I congratulate you for that. -- Jeff3000 04:18, 4 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I've started looking at the article as you can see. It's well written and generally well-organized. I think the main problems with the text are the lack of references for very specific statements; also the fact that most of the references are from the TJC itself, is a weakness. Trying to find third-party references for some of the statements (at least) will strengthen the article greatly. The other weakness is that the article describes some things that are generally not related to TCJ itself in too much detail. For example, by glancing in the "Issues" section, the different topics (such as domestic violence) are described in a lot of detail, but those specific article are there to describe them (thus a link should be just fine). Instead the sections should be about how TCJ deals with the issues, how TCJ tries to affect government policies, what TCJ thinks about government policies relating to the topic, and not what the issues are or what government policies exist. I don't think I've explained myself well, so if you have a question, please ask. I'll continue looking through the article tomorrow. Regards -- Jeff3000 05:03, 4 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Another thing, is the use of {{note}} and {{ref}} tags. It would be much more efficient to use <ref> tags. I may go ahead and change it later. -- Jeff3000 05:07, 4 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

While it's true that there are many third-party references, they are mostly for things that don't need to be in the TJC article, like the number of girls facing genital mutilation etc. Most of the references for the TJC comes from itself. Also I see you've removed a couple fact tags, stating that they are not controversial. I don't think that's appropriate. Anything that cites a specific number or a specific goal needs a citation, regardless of it's controversial or not (see WP:V). I think you should find sources for those statements. And a note is only applicable for the end of a sentence, not the end of a paragraph, and thus if the same reference is used to back up multiple things in a paragraph, it should be at the end of multiple sentences. -- Jeff3000 14:33, 4 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

While older FAs have allowed different methods of citing material, including just at the very end of the whole article, you'll notice that since the new cite.php package has come into use, all new FAs require specific footnotes, and even older FAs are being reviewed (See WP:FARC), and being unlisted. -- Jeff3000 14:43, 4 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]