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Peer review requested

I would like to eventually get Valencia (Spanish Congress Electoral District) to GA status and with that in mind would appreciate some constructive criticism of the article as to what is missing/ what could go in/ what should be excluded/expanded etc. As the article is part of 52 similar articles on the Spanish electoral districts, it would also serve as a template for expanding the other 51. Valenciano (talk) 21:49, 5 August 2008 (UTC)

Looks good, but I should remind you that there should be no spaces between references and punctuation points per WP:FOOTNOTE. This is an example of what I'm seeing in the article: ...the right wing People's Party (PP) won nine of the sixteen seats in the district. ^[2] Do you see the space? It should be: ...the right wing People's Party (PP) won nine of the sixteen seats in the district.^[2] That issue should be addressed before WP:GAN. If further clarification is needed, just give me a note. Thanks, -- RyRy (talk) 05:37, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

I've gone in and removed the spaces. I also did some copyediting, condensed paragraphs, etc. Before going to GAN, you'll need to format the references (see WP:CIT), and the redlinks will probably have to be reduced. Jennavecia ^(Talk) 14:45, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

Thanks. I'm still a bit uneasy about the redlinks thing. The thing is that most of those involve people elected to the national parliament who thus automatically meet notability for politicians, however most of them don't have articles and as they don't usually have articles on the Spanish wikipedia to translate from, it would take some considerable time for that. Valenciano (talk) 18:54, 11 September 2008 (UTC)

Marco Fu

Hey! I have just recently rewriten and expanded this article. I was wondering if anyone can give me any suggestions on how to improve this article to promote it up to good article status. Thanks! (The associated WikiProject is not very active, so that's why I'm asking here) - Nick C (t·c) 21:18, 15 September 2008 (UTC)

You've done a pretty nice job with it so far; the writing is clear, smooth, and grammatical; it's well referenced and well illustrated. There are, as you have indicated, things that need to be done to bring it up to Good article criteria.

• The Lead section is somewhat short and doesn't explain what he's notable for. It only says he's a professional snooker player from Hong Kong- it needs to mention that he's won notable awards and any other notable achievements of his. In his date of birth, the word "born" should be spelled out, not abbreviated, and I think should be in a separate set of parentheses from his Chinese name.
• The section headings that simply mention years should be changed to something more descriptive. Also only the first letter in the section titles should be capitalized (unless a subsequent word is a proper noun).
• If I'm not mistaken, Hong Kong uses day first date format (e.g. 17 September 2008), this is the format that should be used in the article. Also the links to the snooker seasons should include the word season in all the cases, not just the year.
• I think the Records and Tournament wins sections should be consolidated and that the Medal record box should be moved to that section.
• Several disambiguation pages are linked to from the article, these need to all be disambiguated to link to their proper articles.

That's what I see with a quick scan of the article, other editors may have further input. I hope this helps you go it through WP:GA, let us know if it does! Happy editing! —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 00:06, 17 September 2008 (UTC)

Diane Rodriguez

This is my first article. Is it neutral and referenced enough? —Preceding unsigned comment added by SlackR2 (talk • contribs) 21:50, September 15, 2008

Extended content

Diane Rodriguez is a prominent American theatre artist who directs, writes and performs. Schooled in activist art, she received her BA in Theatre Arts from the University of California at Santa Barbara. She is a producer and director at Center Theatre Group, Los Angeles and an Artistic Associate of Cornerstone Theater Company. An OBIE Award winning actor, she is known for using comedy to confront various forms of oppression, often with special attention to issues of gender and sexuality. An enduring influence in Chicano theatre, she was born in the 1950’s to American parents from farm working families. She co-founded two theatre companies, El Teatro de la Esperanza (Theatre of Hope) and Latins Anonymous, and was a leading actress for the seminal Chicano theatre group, El Teatro Campesino (Theater of the Farmworkers). She joined El Teatro Campesino during the mid 70’s. In political sketches for Cesar Chavez and full length works, she honed her comedic skills performing on a variety of stages from flat bed trucks to ancient European Greco Roman amphi-theatres. She moved to Los Angeles in 1985 and in 1988 co-founded the critically acclaimed, comedy troupe Latins Anonymous as a response to the stereotyping and the kind of roles she was receiving in the Hollywood industry. Rodriguez served as director of the Latino Theatre Initiative at the Mark Taper Forum from 1995-2000. She began directing in 1991 and was awarded an National Endownment for the Arts/Theatre Communications Group Directing Award in 1998. She has directed and developed the work of Nilo Cruz, Lynn Nottage, John Leguizamo, Jose Cruz Gonzalez, John Belluso, Octavio Solis, Culture Clash, Oliver Mayer, Migdalia Cruz, Cherrie Moraga. She received Best Direction nominations for her work on Leguizamo’s Spic-O-Rama and Culture Clash's Border Town. She won an OBIE Award (OFF-BROADWAY) Award in 2007 for playing multiple roles in Heather Woodbury’s Tale of Two Cities (Best Ensemble). Published writings Latins Anonymous Houston: Arte Publico Press University of Houston ISBN 1-55885-172-0 Cruising Through Town in a Red Convertible, in anthology Puro Teatro, A Latina Anthology, 2000 Tucson: University of Arizona Press. ISBN 0-8165-1826-2 Water in anthology Crème de la Femme-The Best of Contemporary Women’s Humor Saporta, Nancy, editor 1997 ISBN 0-375-70056-0 The Chicana Files: The Lobos Sightings-Liner Notes; Los Lobos El Cancionero Mas y Mas. 2000 Sire UK & Rhino Entertainment The Pride of the Comunidad: Deeply tied to his culture, Miguel Delgado had a brief career fired by boundless energy. But his friendship was his greatest gift. Los Angeles Times 7 December 1998 sec F. p. 4. A Skeleton In and Out of the Closet. Los Angeles Times, 1 November 1996, sec. F, pp. 1, 20 Plays Latins Anonymous co-written with Luisa Leschin, Armando Molina, Rick Najera The La La Awards co-written with Cris Franco, Armando Molina, Luisa Leschin The Path to Divadom Grenas The Ballad of Ginger Esparza co written with Luis Alfaro Los Vecinos/A play for Neighbors co-written with Luis Alfaro Water Critical studies Sandoval- Sanchez, Alberto and Saporta, Sternback, Nancy. Stages of Life: Transcultural Performance and Identity in U.S. Latino Theatre. Tucson: The University of Arizona Press. 2001 Rodriguez, Diane 62; The Path to Divadom 130, 133, 138, 147-48 ISBN 0-8165-1828-9 Broyles-Gonzalez, Yolanda. El Teatro Campesino Theater in the Chicano Movement. Austin. University of Texas Press 1994 ISBN 0-292-72082-3 Rodriguez, Diane, 45, 128, 137, 141, 156, continued work of 153, 163. on gender issues being ignored 139, not mentioned in history 132. women’s early passivity 139 and Zoot Suit 178 Krasner, David Twentieth-Century American Drama. Writing Beyond Borders: US Latina/o Drama. Rodriguez, Diane 379, 383 Broyles-Gonzalez, Yolanda The Living Legacy of Chicana Performances: Preserving History through Oral Testimony Frontiers Vol. XI, NO. 1 1990 FRONTIERS Editorial Collective pgs 46-51 Articles Rebel’s Advocate by Laura Weinert. Back Stage West June 1, 2000 p. 11 Alarcon, Alicia, Diane Rodriguez Has Taken the Chicano Struggle to New Places in Hollywood, La Opinion, 11 December 1989 External links Official site LatinoLA/People: A Significant and Enduring Influence. Diane Rodriguez is a Latino theatre professional. By Kat Avila Published on LatinoLA: March 16, 2003… Chicano research library Latino Theatre Initiative papers Diane Rodriguez at IMDb Category:American stage actors Category:American television actors Category:People from San Jose, California Category:Living People Category:Mexican American writers Category:American theatre directors

• Comments First off I've gone ahead and collapsed the copy and paste of the article. You didn't need to copy that here, we can look at the one in article space, or you could have done it at your own personal test page at Special:MyPage/Sandbox.
  • Referencing/footnotes: The article does list several sources I'm guessing you used to build the article, but none are specified in line. I would recommend you take a look at WP:Citing sources and use some citation templates or Magnus' make ref tool to generate in line citations. You can also use Harvard referencing if that is was you are used to, but the other variation is much more common and almost a de facto standard on wikipedia. Some of the material seems a bit overly promotional, so take a look through WP:Peacock to make sure you aren't using any overly promotional material.
  • Infobox: A lot of the more basic information that is found on most article about people are contained in something like {{Infobox Person}} including Date of birth, occupation, etc., which helps easily explain to people(especially new page patrollers) notability and other information. But look deeper through Category:People infobox templates to find a more specific infobox.

I hope that helps for starters, you may want to follow up with Wikipedia:WikiProject Theatre or Wikipedia:WikiProject Latinos which are on the article talk page, for more help on this as they may have more specific recommendations on this. -Optigan13 (talk) 06:35, 16 September 2008 (UTC)

Bates method - NPOV?

Over the last several months I have worked a lot on the Bates method article. Since February it has been tagged for neutrality, which has been discussed extensively on the talk page. The controversy mainly surrounds the way sources are used, so just reading through the article itself will not be enough to then give a satisfactory answer to the question of whether it now has a Neutral Point of View. The main (though by no means only) three independent sources are currently referenced in the first paragraph of the article (and many times thereafter.) Often, Bates' writings and the secondary sources which refer to them are both referenced, but I've tried to cut down the detail so as not to go significantly beyond what is discussed by the secondary sources. The article covers all the main criticisms of the Bates method as far as I can tell, and recently there has been some rephrasing to confer more authority to the majority viewpoint.

Also, updated grades would be appreciated for the WikiProjects which currently rate the article, since the B-class ratings are both about a year old. PSWG1920 (talk) 07:57, 18 September 2008 (UTC)

Hi there and my apologies for the fact that your question has languished for the past several days. I think the reason why is because this isn't the best venue for your questions. You would probably do better to ask about the POV issues at the NPOV noticeboard. The article grading is usually done by volunteers from the various wikiprojects- you could request the related projects for a new evaluation by posting on their project talk pages. Hope I've pointed you in the right direction even though I couldn't help you more. Happy editing! —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 08:17, 23 September 2008 (UTC)

From what the NPOV noticeboard says at the top ("Post what is wrong with what content where, what you think it should say, and why. This board is intended for NPOV inquiries of a simple nature."), it does not appear to be a venue to request the type of review I had in mind. I guess the best option, if nothing further comes of this RFF, is to continue to discuss issues as they come up and when necessary use dispute resolution. Unless there is some other way of requesting an in-depth review of a tagged article? PSWG1920 (talk) 16:26, 26 September 2008 (UTC)

Famous people with Typhoid Fever

Union General George B. McClellan —Preceding unsigned comment added by 67.35.161.4 (talk) 09:39, 18 September 2008

Hello and welcome to Wikipedia! You haven't really asked a question, but I'll take a stab at guessing that you want to either add this information to the George B. McClellan article, or create a list of famous people who had Typhoid. The fact that he contracted the disease is already addressed in the article, and there is a list of famous typhoid victims in the disease's article, but a hidden comment there says the list is for people who died from the disease. McClellan's article says he died of a heart attack. Also, while there is a Category:Deaths from typhoid fever, there isn't anything for people who simply had but didn't die from it. So, in the absence of a more specific question, I can't help you any more than that. Best wishes. —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 02:27, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

Dance Parade request for formatting help

Hi--could use some help with the formatting of my article?

I wrote up a basic history of the annual dance parade and festival that has drawn over 9000 dancers of all styles to the streets. The parade down broadway ends with a festival that is really unique.

Once the article gets to be in the traditional wikipedia style I intend to request a peer review and put it up for expansion.

I did a lot of research and have the references listed above the article but am fairly sure they should go below (the instructions said to put them above). Also, the title would look best if it were Dance Parade (with a capital P)--any idea of how to change that?

Can anyone lend a hand to get me going in the write track?

Thanks,

Ononokomachi (talk) 19:34, 21 September 2008 (UTC)

I've gone through and formatted the page. Take a look at the article's history for the WP:LAYOUT edit (diff); the Wikilinking edit (diff); the WP:Citation templates using tools:~magnus/makeref.php for what I've done. The first thing you should do is go through and finish templating the citations as I did in the first example, and then use those citations to make inline notes to back up claims in the article. If you are basing this on personal experience I would recommend you also look at the Wikipedia:Original research policy page. You should see the move tab at the top of the page, so just check the page name against current Wikipedia:Naming conventions on whether it should be Dance parade or Dance Parade. -Optigan13 (talk) 04:26, 22 September 2008 (UTC)

User:Annepi

I would greatly appreciate it if someone could check my page before I post it, at User:Annepi. I am worried that it reads too much like advertising copy. If this is the case, just how far have I stepped over the line?
This page is meant to replace the current version at IBM Haifa Labs.
Annepi (talk) 12:18, 28 September 2008 (UTC)

The only part that looks like it may be a problem is that first sentence (about IBM being rated the best company in the world). That is a general statement that is more appropriate for the main IBM article. I think it would be better if you started with a paragraph summarizing IBM and the purpose for the branches in Haifa. Also, I'm not sure you need to use bulleted lists. (See Wikipedia:MoS#Bulleted_and_numbered_lists.) I hope this helped a little.—RJH (talk) 23:25, 30 September 2008 (UTC)

Adecco

Hello

I have up-dated the adecco content. Can someomen check it and make it then availabel for all?

Thank you.

I am searching for help with my article

FAMILIES OF THE WORLD (Collection) [The Families of the World Collection] records from sunrise to sunset, hour by hour the small events that shape daily lives of Humanity through the one experience common to almost everyone: the family. In 1983 world traveler, author, photographer, philosopher and speaker Hélène Tremblay gave herself the mission of presenting Humanity to Humanity so that every one on earth would know with whom they shared the planet. To achieve this she lived with families which represents the condition of living of the majority in 116 countries. No other person has known Humanity so intimately. Her experience is unique.

Book have been published in Canada, USA, Australia and France by Farrar Straus & Giroux, Camden House & Les Editions Robert Laffont. This project and great human adventure has received support from agencies such as UNICEF, UNFPA, WFP UNESCO and CIDA , and companies such as the Body Shop International.

FAMILIES OF THE WORLD (Company)

The Families of the World Company works in the fields of creation of content, communication, production, publishing and multimedia

Vision: Presenting Humanity to Humanity by being present in all households with The Families of the World Collection.

Contribution By making information accessible to all, The Families of the World Company seeks to : • Promote the development of a world consciousness; • Facilitate the awakening of a peaceful and responsible world citizen; • Participate in the survival and renewal of humankind and its environment. And awakens in each individual in contact with our products: • the pleasure of discovering our common human heritage, and • a desire to join, interact and share life with the citizens of the world.

UK Youth Parliament

The UK Youth Parliament is a youth democracy organisation in the United Kingdom. I've completely rewritten the article, and would love your comments on what to add/change next. I'd ideally like to get it to GA status. Many thanks -- Pretzels^Talk! 15:54, 6 October 2008 (UTC)

Music video game

Hi, I have been working on this article for the past year trying to improve it. It was tagged as needing cleanup last May and I have made a few changes since then, although nothing major. I have posted in talk to ask what more needs to be done, and it was suggested that I bring it here. Can I please have some suggestions for further improvement on the article? I have some ideas of additions to make to the article but before I proceed I'd like to fix whatever problems still remain with what we already have. After spending a year on it I'd like to try to get it finally completely cleaned up. Cheers. -Thibbs (talk) 19:04, 6 October 2008 (UTC)