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'''Sean Patrick Sullivan''' (born November 30, 1958)<ref name="Lawyers.com">{{cite web|url=http://www.lawyers.com/Connecticut/Norwich/Sean-Sullivan-4904597-a.html|title=Sean Sullivan|work=Lawyers.com|publisher=[[LexisNexis]]|accessdate=2008-10-13}}</ref> is an attorney, a retired [[submarine]] [[commander (United States)|commander]] and was [[Captain (United States)|commanding officer]] of the [[Naval Submarine Base New London]]. He is the [[Republican Party (United States)|Republican]] nominee for the [[United States Congress]] in [[Connecticut's 2nd congressional district]].<ref>{{cite web|url=http://www.cpbn.org/program/where-we-live/episode/sean-sullivan|title=2nd District Challenger Sean Sullivan|last=Dankosky|first=John|coauthors=Blanksteen, Melissa|date=2008-04-15|work=Where We Live|publisher=Connecticut Public Broadcasting|accessdate=2008-10-13}}</ref>
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== Career ==
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I've listed this article for peer review because…


Sullivan was appointed to the [[United States Naval Academy]] in 1976 by recommendation of Senator [[Lowell Weicker]].<ref name=Sullivan2008>{{cite web|url=http://www.sullivan2008.com/content/AboutSeanSullivan/tabid/56/Default.aspx|title=About Sean Sullivan|date=2008|publisher=Sean Sullivan for Congress 2008|accessdate=2008-10-13}}</ref> Upon [[graduation]] ''[[magna cum laude]]''<ref name="Lawyers.com"/> with a degree in [[Engineering]], he joined the [[United States Navy]] submarine force and served there for nearly two decades. He became commander of the [[USS Jefferson City (SSN-759)|USS ''Jefferson City'']] in 1996. By the time of his retirement from the Navy, he achieved the rank of Commanding Officer of the Naval Submarine Base in [[New London, Connecticut|New London]].<ref name=Sullivan2008/>
...Ted Bundy is probably the most famous serial killer in American history and one of the most famous ever. I have put quite a bit of effort into the article over time, drawing from six different Ted Bundy books and drawing heavily from four books. Ideally, I would like this to be a Good Article or even a feature article. My purpose at this time is to draw input and suggestions for improvement towards that end.


He has served on [[Ledyard, Connecticut|Ledyard]]'s [[Board of education]], the Military Affairs Committee of the Eastern Connecticut Chamber of Commerce, and is on Governor [[M. Jodi Rell]]'s Commission of the Economic Diversification of Eastern Connecticut.<ref name=Sullivan2008/> He holds a [[Master of Arts (postgraduate)|M.A.]] in National Security Affairs from the [[Naval War College]]<ref name="Lawyers.com"/> and a [[Juris Doctor|J.D.]] from the [[University of Connecticut]].<ref name=Sullivan2008/>
Thanks, [[User:Vidor|Vidor]] ([[User talk:Vidor|talk]]) 18:24, 4 October 2008 (UTC)


He is an associate lawyer with the firm Brown Jacobson P.C. in [[Norwich, Connecticut]].<ref name="Lawyers.com"/>
'''Comments''' from {{User|Ealdgyth}}
* You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, and my first suggestion would be to get your references into order. A number of your website references lack publisher and/or last access dates, which are the bare minimum needed for [[WP:V]]. Books need publisher, author, and page number on top of title. When you've got those mostly straightened out, drop me a note on my talk page and I'll be glad to come back and look at the actual sources themselves, and see how they look in terms of reliability, like I would at FAC. 13:49, 7 October 2008 (UTC)


== 2008 congressional campaign ==
'''Ruhrfisch comments''': Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

*The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way - expand this to three or four paragraphs. Please see [[WP:LEAD]]
Sullivan accepted the [[Connecticut Republican Party]]'s nomination to run against [[Joe Courtney (politician)|Joe Courtney]] for [[Connecticut's 2nd congressional district]] seat on May 9, 2008.<ref name="Journal Inquirer">{{cite news|url=http://www.journalinquirer.com/articles/2008/05/12/connecticut/doc4828438a68605511492749.txt|title=Republicans nominate Sullivan to challenge Courtney in the 2nd District congressional race|last=Silliman|first=Stacey A.|date=2008-05-12|work=[[Journal Inquirer]]|accessdate=2008-10-13}}</ref>
*Article needs more references, for example the first paragraph of University years or this whole part ''On October 18, 1974, Bundy murdered Melissa Smith, the 17-year-old daughter of Midvale police chief Louis Smith; Bundy raped, sodomized, and strangled her. Her body was found nine days later. Next was Laura Aime, also 17, who disappeared when she left a Halloween party in Lehi, Utah on October 31, 1974; her naked, beaten and strangled corpse was found nearly a month later by hikers on Thanksgiving Day, on the banks of a river in American Fork Canyon.'' or most of the list of Victims. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.

*As noted above, internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{tl|cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See [[WP:CITE]] and [[WP:V]]
A poll released by the University of Connecticut on September 30, 2008 showed Courtney leading the race among likely voters fifty percent to twenty-three percent with twenty-four percent undecided. Sullivan has the loyalty of ⅔ of registered Republicans but Courtney has eighty-six percent of registered Democrats and a two to one lead among Independents.<ref>{{cite news|url=http://blogs.courant.com/on_background/2008/09/uconn-poll-courtney-crushing-s.html|title=UConn Poll: Courtney Crushing Sullivan in 2nd|last=Hamilton|first=Jesse A.|date=2008-09-30|work=[[Hartford Courant]]|publisher=[[Tribune Company]]|accessdate=2008-10-13}}</ref>
*Per [[WP:MOS#Images]], images should be set to thumb width to allow reader preferences to take over. For portrait format images, "upright" can be used to make the image narrower. I also note that the article has four fair use images, as well as several free images - does this meet [[WP:NFCC]]?

*There are at least three blockquotes, but per [[WP:MOSQUOTE]] they should be at least four lines of text (two are less than this on my screen). One has no ref either.
===Stances on issues===
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at [[Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog]] (which is how I found this article). Yours, [[User:Ruhrfisch|Ruhrfisch]] '''[[User talk:Ruhrfisch|<sub><font color="green">&gt;&lt;&gt;</font></sub><small>&deg;</small><sup><small>&deg;</small></sup>]]''' 03:13, 13 October 2008 (UTC)
Sullivan is a proponent of spending control in Washington and places the blame for increased spending on [[United States Congress|Congress]] rather than on President [[George W. Bush|Bush]]. He believes health care should be administered by the [[U.S. state|states]] even if funding comes from the [[Federal government of the United States|Federal Government]]. He advocates increasing use of [[naval power]] to stabilize the situation in [[Afghanistan]] rather than increasing ground troop levels.<ref>{{cite news|url=http://www.norwichbulletin.com/homepage/x1272963745/Courtney-Sullivan-debating-in-New-London|title=Courtney, Sullivan spar on economy, defense|last=Gannon|first=Michael|date=2008-10-08|work=[[Norwich Bulletin]]|publisher=[[GateHouse Media]]|accessdate=2008-10-13}}</ref>

He is a strong advocate for [[nuclear power]] and supports removing political obstacles to building new plants.<ref>{{cite news|url=http://www.norwichbulletin.com/homepage/x19928077/Courtney-Sullivan-talk-energy-at-Chamber-of-Commerce-breakfast|title=Courtney, Sullivan talk energy at Chamber of Commerce breakfast|last=Gannon|first=Michael|date=2008-07-01|work=[[Norwich Bulletin]]|publisher=[[GateHouse Media]]|accessdate=2008-10-13}}</ref>

== References ==
{{Reflist}}

==External links==
* [http://www.sullivan2008.com/content/ Campaign website]
* [http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4z-AoI-B1MY&NR=1 Sean Sullivan Talks About Nuclear Power]

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Sean Sullivan
AllegianceUnited States
Service/branchUnited States Navy
Years of service1976 – 2006
RankCaptain
Commands heldUSS Jefferson City
Naval Submarine Base New London
Battles/warsGulf War
Other workLedyard Board of education
Attorney

Sean Patrick Sullivan (born November 30, 1958)[1] is an attorney, a retired submarine commander and was commanding officer of the Naval Submarine Base New London. He is the Republican nominee for the United States Congress in Connecticut's 2nd congressional district.[2]

Career

Sullivan was appointed to the United States Naval Academy in 1976 by recommendation of Senator Lowell Weicker.[3] Upon graduation magna cum laude[1] with a degree in Engineering, he joined the United States Navy submarine force and served there for nearly two decades. He became commander of the USS Jefferson City in 1996. By the time of his retirement from the Navy, he achieved the rank of Commanding Officer of the Naval Submarine Base in New London.[3]

He has served on Ledyard's Board of education, the Military Affairs Committee of the Eastern Connecticut Chamber of Commerce, and is on Governor M. Jodi Rell's Commission of the Economic Diversification of Eastern Connecticut.[3] He holds a M.A. in National Security Affairs from the Naval War College[1] and a J.D. from the University of Connecticut.[3]

He is an associate lawyer with the firm Brown Jacobson P.C. in Norwich, Connecticut.[1]

2008 congressional campaign

Sullivan accepted the Connecticut Republican Party's nomination to run against Joe Courtney for Connecticut's 2nd congressional district seat on May 9, 2008.[4]

A poll released by the University of Connecticut on September 30, 2008 showed Courtney leading the race among likely voters fifty percent to twenty-three percent with twenty-four percent undecided. Sullivan has the loyalty of ⅔ of registered Republicans but Courtney has eighty-six percent of registered Democrats and a two to one lead among Independents.[5]

Stances on issues

Sullivan is a proponent of spending control in Washington and places the blame for increased spending on Congress rather than on President Bush. He believes health care should be administered by the states even if funding comes from the Federal Government. He advocates increasing use of naval power to stabilize the situation in Afghanistan rather than increasing ground troop levels.[6]

He is a strong advocate for nuclear power and supports removing political obstacles to building new plants.[7]

References

  1. ^ a b c d "Sean Sullivan". Lawyers.com. LexisNexis. Retrieved 2008-10-13.
  2. ^ Dankosky, John (2008-04-15). "2nd District Challenger Sean Sullivan". Where We Live. Connecticut Public Broadcasting. Retrieved 2008-10-13. {{cite web}}: Unknown parameter |coauthors= ignored (|author= suggested) (help)
  3. ^ a b c d "About Sean Sullivan". Sean Sullivan for Congress 2008. 2008. Retrieved 2008-10-13.
  4. ^ Silliman, Stacey A. (2008-05-12). "Republicans nominate Sullivan to challenge Courtney in the 2nd District congressional race". Journal Inquirer. Retrieved 2008-10-13.
  5. ^ Hamilton, Jesse A. (2008-09-30). "UConn Poll: Courtney Crushing Sullivan in 2nd". Hartford Courant. Tribune Company. Retrieved 2008-10-13.
  6. ^ Gannon, Michael (2008-10-08). "Courtney, Sullivan spar on economy, defense". Norwich Bulletin. GateHouse Media. Retrieved 2008-10-13.
  7. ^ Gannon, Michael (2008-07-01). "Courtney, Sullivan talk energy at Chamber of Commerce breakfast". Norwich Bulletin. GateHouse Media. Retrieved 2008-10-13.

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